Snowy Mountain

They're not that bad, but they're not that good either.
User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Fri May 13, 2016 11:27 am

Screenshots:

Image

Image

Image

Download:

https://www.mediafire.com/?p5hc5mgto6cmsf5

Snowy mountains is a little level I made, hope you enjoy! :)
Image
Image

User avatar
HeroLinik
Cyan Yoshi Egg
Cyan Yoshi Egg
Posts: 3433
Joined: Fri Dec 20, 2013 1:28 pm
Current Project: Stupid university assignments :/
Location: I do not want you Stalkers.
Chat Username: Look below my avatar
Contact:

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby HeroLinik » Fri May 13, 2016 11:49 am

If I were you, I would take the screens using F12, because it makes the screens clearer and you don't need to worry about cropping or screen sizes. Anyway, video playthrough made:

Image
I support: show
Lol, you got trolled. Move along, if you please.
Check out my content on YouTube! // Don't forget to check out my project as well!

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Fri May 13, 2016 2:23 pm

Linik wrote:If I were you, I would take the screens using F12, because it makes the screens clearer and you don't need to worry about cropping or screen sizes. Anyway, video playthrough made:

So, did you like it?
Image
Image

User avatar
HeroLinik
Cyan Yoshi Egg
Cyan Yoshi Egg
Posts: 3433
Joined: Fri Dec 20, 2013 1:28 pm
Current Project: Stupid university assignments :/
Location: I do not want you Stalkers.
Chat Username: Look below my avatar
Contact:

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby HeroLinik » Fri May 13, 2016 3:12 pm

SomeRandomGuy wrote:
Linik wrote:If I were you, I would take the screens using F12, because it makes the screens clearer and you don't need to worry about cropping or screen sizes. Anyway, video playthrough made:

So, did you like it?
Yeah. It was fun.
Image
I support: show
Lol, you got trolled. Move along, if you please.
Check out my content on YouTube! // Don't forget to check out my project as well!

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Fri May 13, 2016 4:59 pm

What does Yeah. It was fun. mean? Sounds kindaweirdieshnotarealword
Image
Image

User avatar
HeroLinik
Cyan Yoshi Egg
Cyan Yoshi Egg
Posts: 3433
Joined: Fri Dec 20, 2013 1:28 pm
Current Project: Stupid university assignments :/
Location: I do not want you Stalkers.
Chat Username: Look below my avatar
Contact:

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby HeroLinik » Sat May 14, 2016 3:56 am

SomeRandomGuy wrote:What does Yeah. It was fun. mean? Sounds kindaweirdieshnotarealword
It means just that. I enjoyed playing the level, despite it being a little on the short side.
Image
I support: show
Lol, you got trolled. Move along, if you please.
Check out my content on YouTube! // Don't forget to check out my project as well!

Mable
Peach
Peach
Posts: 5840
Joined: Sat Dec 21, 2013 4:23 am
Current Project: Account soon to be deleted
Location: Accountsoontobedeleted
Chat Username: Account soon to be d
Contact:

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby Mable » Sat May 14, 2016 9:31 am

Linik wrote:
I think i can point stuff out of this video for this level.

- Lack of Coins aka there aren't any coins at all (No the one in the block doesn't count)
- No bgo aka i didn't even see a single one at all
- Mistake many people do is putting the smw jumping piranha plant in the ground when it should belong into a pipe. It looks bad and can result into unfair hits
- The cheeps cheeps look kinda spammed into the water.
- Really short

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Sat May 14, 2016 3:40 pm

Tinkerbell wrote:
Linik wrote:
I think i can point stuff out of this video for this level.

- Lack of Coins aka there aren't any coins at all (No the one in the block doesn't count)
- No bgo aka i didn't even see a single one at all
- Mistake many people do is putting the smw jumping piranha plant in the ground when it should belong into a pipe. It looks bad and can result into unfair hits
- The cheeps cheeps look kinda spammed into the water.
- Really short
K, might try to make it better
Image
Image

User avatar
The Thwomp King
Grinder
Grinder
Posts: 1195
Joined: Tue Feb 17, 2015 12:09 pm
Current Project: Super Mario Country
Location: ???

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby The Thwomp King » Thu Jun 09, 2016 1:43 pm

I encourage you to add much more to this level, I think this has potential to be really nice. With me saying this, there's plenty of components you lack. For starters you need to have bgos in the level to help bring more life to the atmosphere; bgo's help make the level more visually appealing, so use that to your advantage. There should be plenty of good snow bgo's you can use to help enhance this level. As far as the graphics given, they're not bad at all. I like what I saw generally with exception to the jumping piranha plants that have an issue. Did you replace both the npc file with it's respective shadow file (example: npc-100m)? The gameplay and gimmicks are very simple, but nice nonetheless. I think your mushroom placement should be fixed to an area where it's not too easy to miss getting it. Every time I played the level I failed to get it once. Overall though the level feels more like a small sample of a level than a complete level, which kills the fun because it feels like I'm being teased.

2.4/10

Please don't be discouraged by this score. I'm not going to move this level yet until the level is ready for a re-review, so think of this current score as where you're at with what you made. I really want to see this level reworked on and expanded upon. I truly think this can be an excellent level, but it needs more work put into it.

Please pm me whenever you have this level redone again or if you want any additional advice. I'll be more than glad to help you and I definitely look forward to playing it again.

Best of luck to you!

Check out my current project, Super Mario Country:

Image

This guy supports any project on smbx, but here are the banners I have:

Spoiler: show
ImageImage

Image
ImageImage
ImageImage
[/center]
Image

User avatar
GhostHawk
Posts: 4341
Joined: Fri Mar 28, 2014 2:51 pm
Flair: how to get a gf using LOGIC
Chat Username: Aero
Contact:

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby GhostHawk » Thu Jun 09, 2016 2:29 pm

I've noticed your levels are pretty bland and not really well thought out, so you should consider posting your future levels in the Casual subforum. There isn't much improvement from the last level I saw by you so you should really read what people have said before posting new levels. Play levels that are in The Best, Pretty Good, and Average to get a feel for what a better designed level is like.
I think the easiest form of "Tax Fraud" is lying to the IRC

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Sat Jun 11, 2016 4:50 pm

AeroMatter wrote:I've noticed your levels are pretty bland and not really well thought out, so you should consider posting your future levels in the Casual subforum. There isn't much improvement from the last level I saw by you so you should really read what people have said before posting new levels. Play levels that are in The Best, Pretty Good, and Average to get a feel for what a better designed level is like.
I've been playing levels in the best and preety good and trying to see how their design compares and how I can improve on my levels.
Image
Image

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Sat Jun 11, 2016 4:52 pm

The Thwomp King wrote:I encourage you to add much more to this level, I think this has potential to be really nice. With me saying this, there's plenty of components you lack. For starters you need to have bgos in the level to help bring more life to the atmosphere; bgo's help make the level more visually appealing, so use that to your advantage. There should be plenty of good snow bgo's you can use to help enhance this level. As far as the graphics given, they're not bad at all. I like what I saw generally with exception to the jumping piranha plants that have an issue. Did you replace both the npc file with it's respective shadow file (example: npc-100m)? The gameplay and gimmicks are very simple, but nice nonetheless. I think your mushroom placement should be fixed to an area where it's not too easy to miss getting it. Every time I played the level I failed to get it once. Overall though the level feels more like a small sample of a level than a complete level, which kills the fun because it feels like I'm being teased.

2.4/10

Please don't be discouraged by this score. I'm not going to move this level yet until the level is ready for a re-review, so think of this current score as where you're at with what you made. I really want to see this level reworked on and expanded upon. I truly think this can be an excellent level, but it needs more work put into it.

Please pm me whenever you have this level redone again or if you want any additional advice. I'll be more than glad to help you and I definitely look forward to playing it again.

Best of luck to you!
I'm remaking this with better graphics, and design.
Btw, if I completely remake the level, will I have to make a new topic?
Image
Image

User avatar
GhostHawk
Posts: 4341
Joined: Fri Mar 28, 2014 2:51 pm
Flair: how to get a gf using LOGIC
Chat Username: Aero
Contact:

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby GhostHawk » Sat Jun 11, 2016 5:27 pm

SomeRandomGuy wrote:Btw, if I completely remake the level, will I have to make a new topic?
You should keep all of your levels in one thread tbh. Makes them easier to keep track of improvement or the lack thereof. js
I think the easiest form of "Tax Fraud" is lying to the IRC

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Sun Jun 12, 2016 8:51 am

AeroMatter wrote:
SomeRandomGuy wrote:Btw, if I completely remake the level, will I have to make a new topic?
You should keep all of your levels in one thread tbh. Makes them easier to keep track of improvement or the lack thereof. js
Thanks, I'll post it here when I am done.
Image
Image

User avatar
The Thwomp King
Grinder
Grinder
Posts: 1195
Joined: Tue Feb 17, 2015 12:09 pm
Current Project: Super Mario Country
Location: ???

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby The Thwomp King » Sun Jun 12, 2016 10:41 am

SomeRandomGuy wrote:
AeroMatter wrote:
SomeRandomGuy wrote:Btw, if I completely remake the level, will I have to make a new topic?
You should keep all of your levels in one thread tbh. Makes them easier to keep track of improvement or the lack thereof. js
Thanks, I'll post it here when I am done.
Sounds good. I'll make a second review of the level from there.

Check out my current project, Super Mario Country:

Image

This guy supports any project on smbx, but here are the banners I have:

Spoiler: show
ImageImage

Image
ImageImage
ImageImage
[/center]
Image

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Sun Jun 12, 2016 12:22 pm

The Thwomp King wrote:
SomeRandomGuy wrote:
AeroMatter wrote:
You should keep all of your levels in one thread tbh. Makes them easier to keep track of improvement or the lack thereof. js
Thanks, I'll post it here when I am done.
Sounds good. I'll make a second review of the level from there.
https://www.mediafire.com/?apazzk77hm33f1p

Image

Image

Image
Image
Image

User avatar
GhostHawk
Posts: 4341
Joined: Fri Mar 28, 2014 2:51 pm
Flair: how to get a gf using LOGIC
Chat Username: Aero
Contact:

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby GhostHawk » Sun Jun 12, 2016 12:32 pm

You have the player start in the wrong spot. This is definitely an improvement from the previous version of the level, but the snow is needlessly annoying. Idk why you used the transparent pipe only once, and the level seems a bit short. Touch it up a bit more and make it more consistent and you could probably get an Average/Pretty Good rating.
I think the easiest form of "Tax Fraud" is lying to the IRC

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Sun Jun 12, 2016 12:44 pm

AeroMatter wrote:You have the player start in the wrong spot. This is definitely an improvement from the previous version of the level, but the snow is needlessly annoying. Idk why you used the transparent pipe only once, and the level seems a bit short. Touch it up a bit more and make it more consistent and you could probably get an Average/Pretty Good rating.
Thanks for the feedback! I'm still working on the level and improving on the first version.
Image
Image

User avatar
The Thwomp King
Grinder
Grinder
Posts: 1195
Joined: Tue Feb 17, 2015 12:09 pm
Current Project: Super Mario Country
Location: ???

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby The Thwomp King » Sun Jun 12, 2016 1:46 pm

Spoiler: show
SomeRandomGuy wrote:
The Thwomp King wrote:
SomeRandomGuy wrote:
Thanks, I'll post it here when I am done.
Sounds good. I'll make a second review of the level from there.
https://www.mediafire.com/?apazzk77hm33f1p

Image

Image

Image
Alrighty so this is a step up. You have much better visuals, and you made good use of custom graphics as well. You helped build up the atmosphere much more, and I especially like the pipes. NPC placement was relatively good, but I don't believe the bullet bills were used well and shouldn't be in the level. As a small note I'm confused by why you changed the name to Snowy Mountain when the level matches Snowy Woods more. Anyway the game play isn't really much different from before, and I still feel as if the level is too short. The level was still more fun to play, but you still have yet to reach a point where the level has good replayability. So there's improvement, but you still have a ways to go.

4.2/10

Moved to Average
Last edited by PixelPest on Sun Jun 12, 2016 2:05 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Reason: Spoilered quote

Check out my current project, Super Mario Country:

Image

This guy supports any project on smbx, but here are the banners I have:

Spoiler: show
ImageImage

Image
ImageImage
ImageImage
[/center]
Image

User avatar
SomeRandomGuy
Bit
Bit
Posts: 132
Joined: Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:20 am
Current Project: 404 Project Not Found

Re: Snowy Mountain

Postby SomeRandomGuy » Sun Jun 12, 2016 4:30 pm

The Thwomp King wrote:
Spoiler: show
SomeRandomGuy wrote:
The Thwomp King wrote: Sounds good. I'll make a second review of the level from there.
https://www.mediafire.com/?apazzk77hm33f1p

Image

Image

Image
Alrighty so this is a step up. You have much better visuals, and you made good use of custom graphics as well. You helped build up the atmosphere much more, and I especially like the pipes. NPC placement was relatively good, but I don't believe the bullet bills were used well and shouldn't be in the level. As a small note I'm confused by why you changed the name to Snowy Mountain when the level matches Snowy Woods more. Anyway the game play isn't really much different from before, and I still feel as if the level is too short. The level was still more fun to play, but you still have yet to reach a point where the level has good replayability. So there's improvement, but you still have a ways to go.

4.2/10

Moved to Average
Thanks for the review!
Image
Image


Return to “Average”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 1 guest