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random factory level

Postby BaconPig » Tue Nov 17, 2015 10:49 pm

dont know what to name it, it's a factory with goombas and stuff
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Re: random factory level

Postby Aero » Wed Nov 18, 2015 11:19 pm

# of exits/10


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Re: random factory level

Postby Enjl » Thu Nov 19, 2015 8:21 am

Even if Death By Glamour is an excellent song, it absolutely does not fit in this environment. Especially when the "level", if you can even call it that, doesn't continue after the first factory section. It just kinda becomes "hey listen to that song I downloaded".
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Re: random factory level

Postby perhaps » Tue Nov 24, 2015 4:16 pm

Pro Tip: Don't post unfinished levels on the forums.
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Re: random factory level

Postby Reiuji Utsuho » Mon Nov 30, 2015 3:29 pm

Review: Random Factory Level created by BaconPig
{Gameplay: 10Pts | Scenery/Music: 10Pts}

Gameplay:
2 out of 10
The biggest issue of this level is the fact that it is incomplete. How an end goal wasn't included is something I don't know, but what I do know is I didn't really enjoy this level. Yes there weren't cheap deaths, or irritating amounts of enemies, but the level didn't feel special. The main section is short and flat, the second section is only a warp zone, and the third section the 'factory,' I assume is just dodging lava only to land to see nothing more.

I would personally recommend working on making this level longer as I think it was planned to be or do more with what already exists, because the idea of a level in a factory-type setting has been done before. There's a wide array of things that could be done with this concept, but for now it just feels like the potential was not taken to it's fullest.


Scenery/Music:
4 out of 10 {2Pts Scenery | 2Pts Music}
The scenery wasn't but but it could've been better, especially in the second and third sections where there is little to none. The 'factory' area does't feel like a factory. All that's there is the lava you're suppose to dodge. When you have a certain theme you're aiming for this opens up the creative possibilities and none of that was taken advantage of. I'd recommend looking into some custom graphics to add onto your setting and also minimizing the lava or putting it to different use.

Music wasn't terrible, but in the last section especially it really didn't fit.


Conclusion:
6 out of 20Pts { 1.30Pts Overall}
This level needs major work. Considering this isn't even finished it should not have been submitted in the first place. It feels very rushed, which may be true considering the most basic of things missing (End goal.) While I would say the first section is the best of this level that's not really saying much considering it's the only part with real substance. When I think of factory I don't think of falling slowly, avoiding lava walls and landing onto a empty ground and essentially being stuck.


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Re: random factory level

Postby firelord » Thu Dec 03, 2015 1:26 am

i thought it was pretty good

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Re: random factory level

Postby firelord » Thu Dec 03, 2015 1:26 am

Neko-san wrote:Review: Random Factory Level created by BaconPig
{Gameplay: 10Pts | Scenery/Music: 10Pts}

Gameplay:
2 out of 10
The biggest issue of this level is the fact that it is incomplete. How an end goal wasn't included is something I don't know, but what I do know is I didn't really enjoy this level. Yes there weren't cheap deaths, or irritating amounts of enemies, but the level didn't feel special. The main section is short and flat, the second section is only a warp zone, and the third section the 'factory,' I assume is just dodging lava only to land to see nothing more.

I would personally recommend working on making this level longer as I think it was planned to be or do more with what already exists, because the idea of a level in a factory-type setting has been done before. There's a wide array of things that could be done with this concept, but for now it just feels like the potential was not taken to it's fullest.


Scenery/Music:
4 out of 10 {2Pts Scenery | 2Pts Music}
The scenery wasn't but but it could've been better, especially in the second and third sections where there is little to none. The 'factory' area does't feel like a factory. All that's there is the lava you're suppose to dodge. When you have a certain theme you're aiming for this opens up the creative possibilities and none of that was taken advantage of. I'd recommend looking into some custom graphics to add onto your setting and also minimizing the lava or putting it to different use.

Music wasn't terrible, but in the last section especially it really didn't fit.


Conclusion:
6 out of 20Pts { 1.30Pts Overall}
This level needs major work. Considering this isn't even finished it should not have been submitted in the first place. It feels very rushed, which may be true considering the most basic of things missing (End goal.) While I would say the first section is the best of this level that's not really saying much considering it's the only part with real substance. When I think of factory I don't think of falling slowly, avoiding lava walls and landing onto a empty ground and essentially being stuck.


*Moved to The Trash Can
i think thats the point of the trash can

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Re: random factory level

Postby Reiuji Utsuho » Thu Dec 03, 2015 4:18 am

firelord wrote:i thought it was pretty good
This isn't a very constructive post. What did you like about this level? ~

firelord wrote:i think thats the point of the trash can
I don't know what you're referring too. (The review I wrote?)
Could you please explain? Also please don't double post. ~

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Re: random factory level

Postby TDK » Fri Dec 04, 2015 1:35 pm

HOW DARE YOU QUESTION THE FIRELORD?

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Re: random factory level

Postby Reiuji Utsuho » Fri Dec 04, 2015 1:48 pm

What? .-.

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Re: random factory level

Postby TDK » Mon Dec 28, 2015 12:17 pm

Ok
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Re: random factory level

Postby Shadow Yoshi » Mon Dec 28, 2015 1:40 pm

Please don't bump threads, TheDinoKing432.

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Re: random factory level

Postby TDK » Wed Dec 30, 2015 9:21 am

This level is unfinished.


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